One of the few ways that the author provides context is in the second paragraph when Bill states “in that story I had read as a child in the ‘West Indian Reader’” this provides some background into the narrators childhood or past. The mood rapidly changes from first to second paragraph. The first paragraph mood is extremely peaceful and serene when he’s describing kashmir, according to the text “Kashmir was coolness and color” however when the author goes to describe the second setting Bill uses words like “the disorder of the bizarre” causing a feeling of chaos and anarchy. Bill also mentions a woman bringing her cow on top of her cottage in order to graze, by doing this he helps create the illusion of disarray considering this is the exact opposite of a normal circumstance. The structure of this passage is kept in paragraph form. It is more difficult to determine the original viewpoint of the author due to the general lack of context, however based on the comparison of the first setting to the next the author could’ve been raised in a small town or has some kind of previous bias against bigger cities and more populated areas.
This story is written in the first person narrative format, this is shown by the author, Bill, stating “in which we rediscovered the drama of clouds.” by writing the story in this format it helps readers get a peek inside of Bills head, as well as feel more connected to the author and story. The purpose of this passage is to describe these two polar opposite places, and the completely different town life. In the first paragraph he describes the people using simple clothing and colors, however in the second paragraph he describes the people using more eye catching outfits and craziness. Bill describe both settings by using several descriptive key terms, according the text “the yellow mustard fields, the mountains, snow-capped, the milky blue sky” these terms are nature based, and don’t evoke any feelings of fear or chaos. However according to the text “of charcoal, tobacco, cooking oil, months-old dirt, and human excrement.” not only are none of these terms nature based, they create a feeling of impurity.
This story is written in the first person narrative format, this is shown by the author, Bill, stating “in which we rediscovered the drama of clouds.” by writing the story in this format it helps readers get a peek inside of Bills head, as well as feel more connected to the author and story. The purpose of this passage is to describe these two polar opposite places, and the completely different town life. In the first paragraph he describes the people using simple clothing and colors, however in the second paragraph he describes the people using more eye catching outfits and craziness. Bill describe both settings by using several descriptive key terms, according the text “the yellow mustard fields, the mountains, snow-capped, the milky blue sky” these terms are nature based, and don’t evoke any feelings of fear or chaos. However according to the text “of charcoal, tobacco, cooking oil, months-old dirt, and human excrement.” not only are none of these terms nature based, they create a feeling of impurity.
Personally I feel as though I displayed a clear understanding of the text, and showed clear evidence of characteristic traits. This is due to the fact that I quoted the text multiple times to back up any claims stated about the passage's characteristics. While there weren't many examples of context to provide I still stated the one example I could find, I didn’t go into depth on the audience, for there wouldn’t be anything to base this off of. With all of this in mind I gave myself a 3 for the entire AO1 section. While I think that my overall analysis was detailed and coherent there is no kind of effective structure present. This eliminated any chances of getting four marks on the first bullet point of the AO3. One example of this lack of structure is in my first paragraph where I went from an in depth discussion on the mood to the absence of a viewpoint. For the second bullet point I would only give myself 3 marks yet again, despite my analysis of the form and language probably sitting at the 4 marks point, I spoke very little on the structure overall. I went somewhat into depth on the writer's style choices when comparing the two paragraphs to one another. I did this by comparing the mood and tone the author was attempting to create, this would leave me with only 3 marks. Throughout my blog I provided multiple examples and quotes from the text, then detailed explanations. However some of my explanations could use some rewording and several grammatical improvements, this would give me about 3 marks as it cannot be considered to be effective.
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